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Some people think that increasing communication usage of computers and mobile phones by young people has had a negative effect on their reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that using
laptops
 and mobile devices may downgrade children's reading and writing
abiltities
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abilities
.I disagree with
this
 phenomenon because technological devices
has
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 actually improved their writing and reading abilities
in
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these days. In
the
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recent years, a lot of technological advancements like mobiles and computers
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 emerged and
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the way
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way
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 of communication
has
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 completely changed than past.Today,
due to
 the heavy usage of mobiles and
laptops
, it
also
influence
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on
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children's education.Today a number of classrooms are operated in
technological
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a technological
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 environment.Teenagers are allowed
laptops
 in
that
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smart classrooms under
the
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guidance and they
have
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 exposed
into
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 the technical world by just clicking a button.It
also
affect
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 positively on
student's
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students'
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 reading
skills
 than past
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because
a
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number of reading apps and
websites
 on
internet
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the internet
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.
For example
,
,
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 Goodread is an online platform which
giving
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 access general public to read many ebooks once they
signed
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 up.It can be observed a large number of adolescents sign up for the
websites
 and it is a positive side of improving their reading
skills
. When it comes to writing
skills
, those devices escalate teens' writing ability
in
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these days by allowing different
websites
accessess
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accesses
access
 to them. In the past, we
have
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 to visit a teacher
for gaining
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to gain
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 writing
skills
 and correct them once we
done
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 a paper.Today, even if in-person teaching
method
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methods
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 exist, teens can learn those things by themselves through
internet
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the internet
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 and they
also
 be able to correct
grammer
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grammatical
 mistakes just in
one
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minutes.
Therefore
 it can be seen a massive improvement in writing
than
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 two or three
dacades
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decades
 ago.
For instance
,
grammerly
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 plays a key role by correcting
grammer
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grammar
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as well as
come
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coming
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 up with
their
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suggestions. In conclusion, I disagree
with
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mobiles and
laptops
 affect negatively on teenagers
bacause
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because
it
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they
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 already
improve
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improves
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 their reading and writing
skills
 by allowing access to different
websites
 and apps.
Therefore
, students can
reas
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read
E books
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E-books
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 and correct grammatical errors by themselves thanks to these technological advancements.
Submitted by Praslah on

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