Task 1: clothing export The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries.
The line graphs depict the statistics of various clothing shipped from several nations during the duration of four years. By and large,
Myanmar
was the most successful country in selling garment products sent abroad in the middle of the survey.
As for the majors surveyed in
1999 to 2003, there are three countries that exported types of clothing over the world which are Colombia, Japan, and Change preposition
from
Myanmar
. The graphic illustrates that Colombia and Japan showed the same trends over the years during the survey. In addition
, both
of the countries Correct determiner usage
neither
never
reached the selling of more than 700 million dollars.
Correct your spelling
ever
Furthermore
, Myanmar
began exporting garments in 2000 and showed a
rapid growth across Japan and Colombia, which Correct article usage
apply
totaled
800 million dollars. Change the spelling
totalled
In addition
, Myanmar
reached the peak of selling in 2001 which counted over 900 million dollars. However
, in the next year in 2002
Add a comma
2002,
Myanmar
showed the
rapid decline Correct article usage
a
of
Change preposition
in
the
trade.Correct article usage
apply
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