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Task 1: clothing export The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries.

Task 1: clothing export The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries.
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The line graphs depict the statistics of various clothing shipped from several nations during the duration of four years. By and large,
Myanmar
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 was the most successful country in selling garment products sent abroad in the middle of the survey. As for the majors surveyed
in
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from
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 1999 to 2003, there are three countries that exported types of clothing over the world which are Colombia, Japan, and
Myanmar
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. The graphic illustrates that Colombia and Japan showed the same trends over the years during the survey.
In addition
Linking Words
,
both
Correct determiner usage
neither
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 of the countries
never
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ever
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 reached the selling of more than 700 million dollars.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
Myanmar
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 began exporting garments in 2000 and showed
a
Correct article usage
apply
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rapid growth across Japan and Colombia, which
totaled
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totalled
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 800 million dollars.
In addition
Linking Words
,
Myanmar
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 reached the peak of selling in 2001 which counted over 900 million dollars.
However
Linking Words
, in the next year in
2002
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2002,
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Myanmar
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 showed
the
Correct article usage
a
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 rapid decline
of
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in
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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trade.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words myanmar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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