The bar chart shows how many tourists visit four different museums in London over a five month period from June to October.
The bar graph
domenstrates
the number of tourists who visit four different UK museums between June and July.
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demonstrates
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is National museum
is the least popular, Capitalize word
Museum
while
, history
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the History
museum
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Museum
accountes
for the majority of visitors over the period in question.
An important fact is by Correct your spelling
accounts
accounted
Augest
, both Correct your spelling
August
history
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the history
museum
and British
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the British
museum
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Museum
climb
dramatically and Wrong verb form
climbed
peak
at 600.000 and 700.000 visitors respectively. Despite the fact that by the end of the Wrong verb form
peaked
period
figures for British Add a comma
period,
museum
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museums
witness
a sharp fall to about 480.000, it is the most significant Wrong verb form
witnessed
museum
in popularity.
Also
evident is, figures
for Correct article usage
the figures
national
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the national
museum
do not change over the studied period and it is fluctuating marginally around 200.000 people. , whereas
, after a slight rise in science museum
popularity in september
it Change the capitalization
September
begin
to go down and reach 300.000 in September.Change the verb form
begins
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