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Advantages and disadvantages of working abroad. Why do people prefer to work abroad?

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Nowadays, working abroad is
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 of the most discussed issues among
people
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.
Residents
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 leave families and
countries
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 looking for more profitable occupations in other
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. In
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 phenomenon is not only positive, but
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 negative. The following essay will present all the merits and demerits of working overseas On the
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 working abroad has lots of positive sides.
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working in other
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 is a
short time
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 process with visible results. It means
people
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 have
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access to earn profitable currency in a short time.
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,
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 are able to cure their financial issues faster and successfully. Second,
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 working abroad individuals learn new customs, traditions,
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and culture
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as a result
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 it will increase their horizons.
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,
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 working abroad and facing different situations
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 will have
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access to
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beneficial qualities
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 as confidence and adapting to new conditions.
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, with
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 of these
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people
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 will manage to attain their professional and financial matters more easily wherever they inhabit.
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foreign workplaces apply distinctive working approaches and strategies.
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, whole helpful strategies they have learnt and mastered abroad can be used in
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,s local
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people
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 who labor abroad face diverse challenges.
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,
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 come across culture shock
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 it is because they see new
culture
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cultures
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,
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and customs. Especially adaptation to the environment will be hard enough.
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, it might cause depression and
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 problems in the beginning.
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, language can be
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a barrier
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 that
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the majority
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workers
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 face in a foreign country. Normally, ordinary workers can speak foreign languages only
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on
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 fact will destroy workers to communicate with
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 and
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 profitably.
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, the main part of
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 working abroad are not masters
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 significant area. Because they tend to change jobs depending on their salary. In summary,
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 the trend of working abroad is
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 phenomenon
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 can follow currently.
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, the most important thing is to be a qualified specialist in
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 direction despite the destination
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work
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. If
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 are forced to
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 abroad it is necessary to be prepared enough to live and
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 abroad successfully.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrinsic preference
  • liberating
  • physical activity
  • chronic diseases
  • natural light
  • job satisfaction
  • environmental connection
  • monotonous
  • dynamic
  • stimulating
  • fulfilling career
  • creativity
  • inspire
  • office politics
  • corporate structures
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