The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015.

The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015.
The bar chart depicts a
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museum
visited by people in London over 5 months in 2015.
Overall
, there was a peak season in August, followed by September and October.
While
the highest
number
of
visitors
was
British
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the British
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Museum
in
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average,
National
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the National
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museum
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had the least popularity. In June, all of the
museum
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had nearly the same
number
of
visitors
around 400.000, except
National
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the National
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Museum
with approximately 200.000. By June, there had been no significant increase in the
number
of
visitors
.
In addition
, August was the most popular month to visit
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the
museum
. there was a rapid growth
more
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than 50 % of
individual
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individuals
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visiting at British
Museum
.
This
number
also
was followed by
History
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the History
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museum
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with
moderate
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rise at about 200.000
visitors
compared
from
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the
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last
month. Both Science and National
museum
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only increase slightly to reach around 400.000 and 310.000, respectively.
Then
, the
personal's
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interest
to visit
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in visiting
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at
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the
museum
started to decrease steadily in the next two
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months
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later, reaching
at
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nearly the same level between June and July.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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