IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledgement or experience.

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 is getting a lot of attention today. I shall say that , as for as we can see,looking at it by and large and
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 the different
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, I reckon
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 will not replace
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. The reason is some
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 enjoy the feeling when they read
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,you can touch the real
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 and feeling what
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like
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it, you
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 can smell
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, different
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 book have different touch and smell.
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 have
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 collection value, a lot of
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 look beautiful. Third，some
person
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people
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 have
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 they can't read
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 and
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 have more damage to our eyes than
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. If a child only
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e-book
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 and often read, it
probably
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more
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easier to be nearsighted than read
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paper
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 book. So,
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, in my opinion, I don’t think
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 will be
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, there are abound
peoples
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 love and need
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Coherence & Cohesion
To improve your logical structure, use clear paragraphing to separate your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea and that your argument progresses logically through the essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include both an introduction and a conclusion. Introduce the topic and your viewpoint in the introduction. Summarize your main points and restate your opinion in the conclusion. This will make your essay more complete.
Task Achievement
Develop your main points with more detail and explanation. Use examples to support your arguments. Ensure that your examples are relevant and enhance your argument.
Task Achievement
Express your ideas clearly and comprehensively by planning your essay before writing. Consider the prompt carefully and ensure that each paragraph explores a different aspect of the issue.
Task Achievement
To provide a more well-rounded essay, consider discussing both sides of the argument, even if you are presenting a clear opinion. This shows you have considered alternative viewpoints.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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