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Artificial Intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statement?

#intelligence #teachers #classroom
Many believe that
A.I.
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 could take the place of teachers in the near future.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 statement because computers are not advanced yet and students can effectively use online courses
instead
 of attending class. Computer learning is not at the stage yet where it can do the job of a competent educator.
This
 is because students require many things that a computer cannot provide,
such
 as evaluation, emotional support and assessment. These soft skills are absolutely essential for the proper education of a child or adult and there is no computer program that can compete with human beings in these areas.
For example
, Grammarly is an application that can check for grammar errors but it falls short for English learners because it cannot tell someone what their main weaknesses are or explain why the mistake was made or how it can be fixed.
However
, distance learning can be used by teachers to improve lessons.
That is
 to say that they can enhance their ability to teach by using
this
 technology.
This
 allows the very best in their field to reach anyone in the world, record their lessons and provide interactive feedback.
For example
, the very best universities in the world, namely Harvard and Stanford, now offer online learning platforms that allow anyone to enjoy their course for free and
also
 have the option of having feedback sessions with their tutors through Skype.
This
 does not replace the teacher but makes them even more effective and available to a wider number of audiences.
Although
 neural networks have made great strides in the past number of years, they have not reached the point where they can educate at an effective level
due to
 lacking pedagogical skills.
However
, teachers can use these tools, particularly online courses, to enhance their teaching and help even more people to learn.
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task achievement
To improve task response, ensure that the essay directly addresses all parts of the prompt throughout the essay. Keep the argument consistent and directly engage with the question asked.
coherence cohesion
To have a better logical structure, it may help to create a more detailed outline before beginning to write, ensuring that each paragraph flows logically to the next.
coherence cohesion
Examples provided in the essay should be more directly related to the subject of A.I. replacing teachers and give more insight into how A.I. specifically falls short in comparison to human teachers in order to strengthen your main points

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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