The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of retain the table shows where the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons very relevant

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of retain the table shows where the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons very relevant
The chart and table
depicts
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the information about
share
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the share
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of
budget
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the budget
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which was distributed
on
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in
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particular
particulor
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particular
area
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areas
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and
share
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the share
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of police officials over a
year
period between 2017 and 2018 after the analysis, it is clearly stated that the source of money for
national
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the national
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government, a major department where most money went into, had an almost 2
million
rise jumping from 175million to 177
million
while
, other sources remained constant over a
year
period
moreover
, local taxes saw a significant change in their
souce
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source
of income rising from 92
million
to 102
million
a sudden leap of 10
million
had been seen in one
year
time.
consequently
, the total
budget
for law officials had increased
of
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18
million
expanding from 304
million
to 318
million
furthermore
, A huge
budget
had been spent on salaries for office staff and officials but
still
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a 6% of
drop
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the drop
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had been seen from 2017 to 2018 in
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contrast
constrast
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contrast
,
budget
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the budget
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spent on technology showed a change in their pattern unlike salaries rising from 8% to 17% almost double of that of
previous
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the previous
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year
however
, building and transport showed no change on their trend and remained constant over
an
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year
consuming 17%
budget
overall
, it is clearly vividly manifested that
national
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the national
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government
goverment
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government
remained
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first when retaining the
budget
coming from an area
while
most
budget
spent
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was spent
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on providing salaries to law
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enforcement
enforment
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enforcement
and local staff
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, year, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fiscal
  • allocation
  • revenue
  • government grants
  • taxpayer contributions
  • expenditure
  • financial year
  • budgetary changes
  • capital investment
  • operational costs
  • shift in priorities
  • percentile changes
  • incremental increase/decrease
  • funded
  • allocated
  • resources
  • budgeting decisions
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