The number of cars has increased significantly in major cities. What problems does this cause and what are some solutions to these problems?
In the modern era, most cities have traffic jams because risen dramatically the amount of cars. The cause of
this
issue and the possible solution to tackle this
issue will be discussed in this
essay.
One
of the first causes is private vehicles are more effective due to
less time
to go to different places in one
day. For instance
, my sister goes to East Jakarta from Bogor in only 30 minutes by car, but if she uses public transportation
such
as a bus or train, it will take time
over one
hour. Moreover
, we have to change bus or train during the trip because there are no direct to the destination. Another cause is many people prefer to choose a car because time
is valuable.
On the other hand
, this
situation can cause serious problems. One
of the first problems is the traffic jams will increase significantly. For example
, everyone in the city left at the same time
making the streets more crowded. Another problem that needs to be considered is the amount of air pollution will have risen dramatically. For instance
, many cities have bad air conditions caused by the large number of citizens choosing private transport.
According to
this
situation, a possible solution to this
problem would be the
government can make a convenient public transport. Change preposition
for the
For instance
, public transportation
routes that are easy to reach by people and disability friendly. Another solution is the authority can also
make the public vehicles free for all of the citizens. This
policy will increase the number of public transportation
users.
In conclusion, the problem of this
case is private vehicles are more effective and convenient. So, the government should make proper public transportation
with free service and easy to reach.Submitted by azizahqonitas on
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