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Nature of the overall Engineering Project and my particular Work Area

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 in
this
project
 to apply my engineering knowledge and acquire new knowledge. I had experience with Shell welding lines, Crankshaft lines, and Laboratory and Power Press machines, so I decided to apply my knowledge to these machines. My whole career is related to the Installation, Commissioning, and Maintenance of different machines and systems, so I
also
 engaged in these activities here. Some of my academic works and subjects
also
 aligned with these activities. The primary focus of
this
 Kappa
project
 is to increase the production
capacity
 by 200% to meet internal and external demand. The Walpha compressor
plant
's maximum
capacity
 was 1.6
million
 per year,
whereas
 the
capacity
 of the Kappa
plant
 was 3.2
million
 a year.
Thus
, the total
capacity
 would be 4.8
million
 per year. The secondary objective was horizontal integration by acquiring the three renowned brands of Europe
such
 as ACC, ZEM, and VOE, which may lead to entry and spread in the European market. The budget for
this
project
 was 150
million
 dollars, and the time limit was 18 months. During the initiation phase, I had to work closely with different departments for the feasibility study. Comparing the cost of new
plant
 installation with the cost of acquisition, we found that the acquisition was more cost-effective and beneficial as we were getting three new brands.
Thus
, we finalized to buy and carry
this
plant
 from Italy and
then
 install and commission it in Bangladesh. The
project
's key deliverables include
Project
 Charter, WBS creation, Team Charter, Integrated risk management, Issue Management, Risk Register, Issue Register, Document Management, Calendar Integration, etc. It is a multi-phase
project
. The phases are dismantling at Belluno in Italy, carrying to Bangladesh, and Installation and commissioning in Bangladesh. There was a significant constraint for us to implement the dismantling phase in Italy, in which the environment, culture, food habits, and language were different from ours.
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure that your essay has a clear purpose and addresses all parts of the prompt thoroughly. It is essential to offer more comprehensive details regarding the engineering tasks you were responsible for, considering the overall project and how those tasks contributed to the project aims.
Coherence & Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, work on organizing your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs with topic sentences, and a conclusion. Ensure logical progression of ideas from one paragraph to another. Use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively to aid the reader's understanding.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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