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High stakes english language tests such as IELTS, are being increasingly delivered on the computers. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, when our society is in the stage of rapid transformation , a tendency to pass important exams on computers can be observed. It is agreed, that children these days are better qualified in gadgets and
this
 way of the examination can help them to cope with stress ,
however
 , some risks exist because of the possibility of cheating.
This
 essay,
firstly
, will discuss what positive sides
this
 issue has
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 followed by an analysis of drawbacks ,before coming to a reasoned conclusion.
To begin
 with, technological progress influences humanity in all aspects of life. Undoubtedly, tests on the computer are a revolutionary way to study and pass exams which simplify
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 and
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life
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.
Firstly
, typing on the keyboard is faster than using a pen and paper to write an essay,
for example
.
In addition
, each person has their own calligraphy,
therefore
 , checking tests on the screen can help to avoid misunderstandings because of the non-understandable handwriting.
Secondly
, there are a lot of people whose self-confidence increases dramatically when they pass the exam on the computer
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because there is no possibility that their pan will stop writing,
for instance
.
Also
 , there is no need to control students whether they cheat or not because programs give the ability to change the order of questions.
On the other hand
, it is necessary to provide
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double check of students who participate in the test,because there is the risk of using some other gadgets which can help them to pass successfully.
For example
, microphones, micro headphones or even phones can be used as devices to receive support. In
this
 case, cameras on each screen have to be installed, which can be quite expensive for organisers.
Nevertheless
, it is not impossible to solve some problems which can appear.
To conclude
,
this
 essay agrees that some drawbacks of using computers during exams still exist,
however
, the positive sides are definitely overwhelming,
therefore
this
 issue can be claimed as beneficial.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion are more fleshed out and clear. Both sections were minimal and need to better encapsulate the key points and stances of the essay.
logical structure
Focus on improving the logical structure of your essay. Some ideas are presented abruptly; transitions between points can be refined to aid in the logical flow and enhance the readability of your essay.
supported main points
Support your main points with more detailed and relevant examples. While you provided some examples, they could be more specific, detailed and relevant to clearly illustrate your arguments.
complete response
Make sure to address the task fully by providing a balanced discussion on both advantages and disadvantages. Ensure that your response maintains relevance to the topic throughout the essay.
clear comprehensive ideas
Your ideas are generally clear, but strive for more depth and comprehensive development of these ideas. Expand on the points made to demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.
relevant specific examples
Integrate more specific examples to substantiate your arguments. This provides persuasive power to your essay, helping to convincingly support your stance on the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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