Scientist and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?
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people
argue that Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
scientist
or technology Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
expertist
look Correct your spelling
expertise
experts
valuable
rather than musicians and Correct quantifier usage
more valuable
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artists
artist
in our society, I believe Fix the agreement mistake
artists
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scientists
scientist
seem valuable because Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
thier
impact Correct your spelling
their
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on
for
our Change preposition
on
environment
and related current Fix the agreement mistake
issues
issue
in our society.
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issues
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with, as scientist
is difficult to accomplish a problem related Add an article
a scientist
with
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to
environment
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environmental
issue
or Fix the agreement mistake
issues
health
deases
. Correct your spelling
diseases
disease
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, the
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apply
scientist
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scientists
commitment
to their lives to Replace the word
commit
gives
all of their own for Wrong verb form
give
this
occupation also
discipline in their Correct word choice
and also
research
to achievment
new Correct your spelling
achieve
achievement
product
which Fix the agreement mistake
products
gives
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have
impact
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an impact
for
all Change preposition
on
people
. For that reason, scientist
become respectful and well-known. Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
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in Change the noun form
Scientists
variaty
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various
field
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fields
such
as technology, health
, and environment
, all Correct article usage
the environment
of
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apply
them
try to Correct pronoun usage
apply
helping
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help
people
with their research
. For example
, research
on
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in
health
field. The Add an article
the health
found
of vaccine covid-19 Replace the word
finding
gives
beneficial Verb problem
is
for
all Change preposition
apply
round
the world Correct your spelling
around
which
most Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
struggle to fight with
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apply
that
new virusCorrect determiner usage
the
,
and currently doesn't worry again Remove the comma
apply
with
covid-19.
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about
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, musicians and artists also
hard occupation for entertain
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entertaining
people
from exhausted or after hardworking, not much
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many
people
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a lot of Wrong verb form
face
people
. However
, there a plenty Change preposition
of opportunity
opportunity
to become Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
entertaiment
. Correct your spelling
entertainment
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, a women have 1 million followers in
their social media and Change preposition
on
then
agency
film Correct article usage
an agency
recruit
her to become Change the verb form
recruits
a
artist and Change the article
an
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stream
in
all around the country. Different Correct your spelling
it
with
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from
scientist
their
need Correct pronoun usage
apply
dedications
, working hard, plenty of Fix the agreement mistake
dedication
failure
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failures
scientist
to become valuable jobs
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scientists
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a hard
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apply
research
all of this
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fields
such
as environment
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the environment
health
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of technologyCorrect article usage
the improvement
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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The introduction should present the topic and your opinion clearly. The body paragraphs should each have a main idea, supported by examples or explanations. The conclusion should summarize the points made and restate your opinion.
cohesion
Work on connecting ideas more logically and smoothly. Use transitional words and phrases to help the reader understand the relationship between your ideas. Avoid jumping from one idea to another without clear connections.
development
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example
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task response
Address the prompt directly by exploring both sides of the argument thoroughly. Ensure that your essay reflects a balanced consideration of the topic and provides clear reasoning for your stance.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
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