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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The given charts show the comparison of the average maximum and minimum
temperature
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 in Celcius
degree
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degrees
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 and the average
of
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apply
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rainfall
days
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 count at
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Canbera
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Canberra
 and
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Brisband
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Brisbane
.
Overall
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,
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Brisband
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Brisbane
 has the highest average maximum
temperature
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as well as
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 the most frequent day of rainfall in one year period.
To begin
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, both
Brisband
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 and
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Canbera
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Canberra
are
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apply
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experience a
fluctuative
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fluctuating
fluctuation
temperature
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 throughout the year.
Brisband
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reachs
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reaches
reach
 its peak on the average maximum
temperature
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 in February by hitting 30,
whereas
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 the lowest average
temperature
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 in the middle year with around 10.
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Canbera
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Canberra
 has its highest average maximum
temperature
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 in a similar month with
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Brisband
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Brisbane
 by hitting just over 25
while
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 the lowest average minimum
temperature
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as
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is as
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 low as around 0. In terms of the average
days
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 of rainfall,
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Brisband
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Brisbane
 and
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Canbera
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Canberra
 experience it in
an
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the
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 opposite way. When
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Brisband
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Brisbane
 has its most frequent rainy day in February at 14
days
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,
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Canbera
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Canberra
 shows the
least
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last
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 day at 7
days
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. In July,
while
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Brisband
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Brisbane
 hits its
least
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last
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days
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 of
raining
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rain
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 at 7,
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Canbera
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Canberra
 faces the highest
frequent
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frequency
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 at 10.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, days, canbera, brisband with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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