Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Our current way of life will have a negative impact on future generations.

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In
this
modern epoch, the environment has been affected enormously compared to the past. Our current way of daily activities will bring a negative consequence for the generation to come. I completely agree with
this
notion for the following reasons why I think
this
manner. To commence with, people's way of everyday action can lead to affecting the environment more rapidly than ever before and
this
will create more adverse effects for upcoming
generations
.
This
is because of the air pollution from using a large number of private vehicles every day on the road,
thus
, the ozone layer has been affected and
this
will be a huge
life- threating
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life-threating
problem for the upcoming persons.
For example
, numerous production
companie's
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toxic emissions have been mixed into the air in order to the ozone layer will be affected in
future
. Needless to say, current individual's
action
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would be created negative impacts for the next era communities.
Furthermore
,
water
pollution is another
threaten
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issue for the upcoming
generations
because toxic and chemical wastes are dumped into the
river
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and the landfills from the manufacturing companies,
consequently
,
water
and land are polluted by these adverse activities.
For instance
, the
future
communities will not have pure drinking
water
and they have to face many sicknesses like diarrhoea and typhoid fever because of impure drinking
water
.
Besides
,
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agricultural activities
would
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be affected in the
future
and people will be
facing
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hungry
due to
spoiled
the
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farming land from
today
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generations
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generation
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.
Therefore
,
future
eras will face more negative impacts from today's
people
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people's
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actions.
To conclude
, the upcoming populations
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face
the
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environment threatening
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issues;
the
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air and
water
pollution are the biggest
threaten
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for
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the next
generations
from the current person's way of
actions
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action
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.
Hence
, I strongly agree with
this
statement the current person's activity will have a negative effect on
future
generations
.
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