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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting
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The bar chart illustrates the number of families in the United States by their
income
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 in a year from 2007, 2011, and 2015. The unit measurement is in millions. In 2007, the proportion of households with 100,000
USD
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 or more
income
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 became the highest at around 30
million
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. After four years, it experienced a small fall to 27
million
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. It was closely followed by the population with 25,000 - 49,999
USD
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 salary with over 25
million
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. It had its peaked in 2011 at about 30
million
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 in total.
While
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, the households'
income
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 of 25,00 - 49,999
USD
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, below 25,00
USD
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, and 50,000 - 74,999
USD
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 just had over 25, 25, and over 20
million
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 each.
Next,
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in 2015, the proportion of families with 100,000 or more
income
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 drastically surged up to close to 35
million
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. Similar to the population of 75,000 - 99,999
USD
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 which
also
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 increased in total.
While
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 the proportion of families with 5,000 until less than 75,000 remained the same.
On the other hand
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, two other categories had a sharp drop.
Overall
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, the numbers of population with over 5,000 until less than 75,000 remain steady from 2007 until 8 years later.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, usd, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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