The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The column chart gives information about the entertainment venue's attendance (in thousands),
while
the table shows ticket prices
for seven different types of events in 2009. Overall
, the number of attendees had no correlation with the admission
price, and cinema
was the most affordable event.
To commence with, the entertainment events were divided into three main categories, Correct article usage
the cinema
sports
, theme
parks, and cinemas. Sports
had no more than 200 thousand attendances, thus
, it became the lowest number, even its
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though its
admission
prices
were the second lowest. Theme
Park which had the highest prices
of admission
at 70 dollars, only scored no more than 400 thousand attendances. Meanwhile, Cinemas had almost fourfold Fix the agreement mistake
attendance
attendances
compared with Fix the agreement mistake
attendance
theme
parks, and around 500% higher than sports
.
Regarding admission
prices
, the cinema was the entertainment venue that offered the most affordable price at 15 dollars for individual tickets, while
the family ticket consisted of four people at 55 dollars. Otherwise
, although
had more varieties and the highest ticket prices
, sports
admission
prices
were cheaper than the theme
park's price of admission
on average.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, admission, sports, theme with synonyms.
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