The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

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information of secondary school

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in five different regions in 2009.

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it is clear that

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Luxenbourgh's

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Luxenbourg's

teachers

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earned the highest remuneration package both starting of their career and after the 15

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, it took rather long

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to entitle top rate. At the starting point of the teaching career, Luxenbough's

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recieved

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the highest payment was $80000,followed by

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Denmark

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$47,000,

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Australia

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$34600,and

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Korea

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$30500.

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, Japan paid the lowest

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at the start of the period.

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, After 15

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teachers

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in Luxemburgh who entitled to earn

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remuneration package than other nations which was $112000.

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Denmark

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paid $54,000, followed by

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$52600 and

Australia

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$48000.

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after 15

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to $490000. When it comes to

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Luxemburgh

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package of $139000

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and Japan paid $84500 and $62400 respectively.

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and

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payments

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unchanged.

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had to wait 37

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to reach their highest

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follwed

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by 30 in

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and

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took 8 and 9

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The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

Many people are involved in sports when they are young but strobo they are adult. Why do many does stop doing physical exercises what can be done about this problem?

Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less time with their parents. What is the reason? What problems can this cause?

As science and technology contribute most to the development of society, science students should get more financial support from the government than students in other fields (e.g. business, language). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that the use of mobiles (cell) phones should be banned in public places such as in libraries, shops and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that the use of computers in primary and secondary schools makes education more enjoyable and efficient, while others believe that too much dependence on computers causes both physical and emotional problems. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.