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Marketing and promotion is the key to a successful business. To what extent do you agree?

#promotion #business
It is considered by many that marketing and
promotion
 are integral tools for a successful
business
.
Although
 I think that the process of promoting
products
 can play an important role, the quality of these
products
 should be considered as important as marketing. First of all, people who are unaware of the existence of certain
products
 will never buy them.
In other words
, advertising provides people with information about new
products
, and after a
while
, depending on the
promotion
 of the
company
, these
products
 will reach big audiences. The more advertisements firms and companies use, the more opportunities they have to attract new customers.
Moreover
, companies can
also
 become famous and popular because of marketing, and it can result in increasing profit.
Thus
, it can be concluded that marketing and the process of promoting new
products
 and services are really important for any
business
due to
 new opportunities for growth.
On the other hand
, having effective marketing is insufficient in order to reach success in any
business
. If a
company
 has a lot of advertisements but its
products
 have much worse quality compared to their competitors, undoubtedly
this
company
 has a few chances to reach success. To put it simply, it would be impossible for any firm or
company
 to rule the market without a good product even if they have the best marketing and
promotion
 among competitors.
In contrast
,
products
 with higher quality have quite good odds of shooting for the moon and becoming popular among customers.
To sum up
, despite the fact that marketing and
promotion
 are integral tools for
business
, I once again reaffirm that the combination of both high-quality
products
 and the right strategy
promotion
 is more likely will lead to better results.
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