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Write a letter to the restaurant manager to organise a party. Why you want to throw the party What special arrangements you will need Any relevant questions

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
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 letter in order to let you know that I heard many positive feedback regarding your organising skills related to numerous events. My birthday is coming next week, I want you to make it memorable . Being an introverted personality, there is a small group gathering of 10-15 people. I have decided on
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a Hollywood
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 theme for my party so, you should consider
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 theme for decoration.
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, most of my colleagues are fitness freaks as they prefer to maintain their diet on that day as well . Unfortunately, you have to manage the menu with healthy food rather than high-calorie items. Do I need to pay the whole amount in advance? if yes,
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 please send me your banking details. I have sent all the other details
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 your email. You can contact me back via email regarding any
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 information. I look forward to hearing back from you soon. Yours sincerely, Raman

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coherence cohesion
Consider dividing your paragraphs more clearly based on distinct ideas to improve readability.
task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task with detailed information.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone which is suitable for the context.
logical structure
Logical flow of ideas is maintained throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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