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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the future lots of countries around the world will not only face environmental issues, but
also
 rising population and educational matters will be considered serious challenges. My
country
 is not an exception; some disasters will
also
 hit my
country
. So at
this
 point, my government should use various methods to tackle them. Without a doubt, drought will hit my
country
 in the next ten years.
Due to
 air pollution, rain clouds disappear when they meet the
country
’s atmosphere and that's why the number of dried lakes has been increasing. Less rain means the declining volume of water sources to use in industries and providing clean water. I read a news
last
 week that mentioned authorities have concerns about
this
 problem, and if nobody finds any solution, it is an undeniable problem that we will face, and we should be prepared for over fifteen-year drought period in the maximum next ten years. The solution to
this
 problem is tied to the technology. The government should come up with methods to improve the level of water sources in dams and groundwater savings. Thanks to the technology that gives us
this
 opportunity to make artificial rain when we don’t have a real one. In
this
 way, experts can create fake rainy clouds and send them to the sky. The more they send them the more we will have rainy days.
For instance
, in the
last
 two years, Saudi Arabian residents have become surprised because of the repeated rainy days during winter. It seems they will be changing their
country
's climate by
this
 method. The obstacles countries should overcome in the future will not diminish. So in these circumstances, just government can find ways to solve them. I hope all the
country
’s authorities become more conscious to be beneficial for their population.
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Introduction & Conclusion
Make sure to have a clear introductory paragraph, presenting the main points or challenges you will discuss, followed by a conclusion that summarizes your essay and provides a final standpoint or recommendation.
Paragraphing
Use paragraphing effectively. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, providing clear topic sentences and supporting sentences with specific details or examples.
Linking Words
Connect your ideas smoothly using a variety of linking words and phrases. This will improve the flow of your essay and make it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
Supporting Details
Ensure each paragraph expands on the main point and has ample evidence or examples to support it. The examples should be detailed and relevant.
Task Response
Focus on answering all parts of the question thoroughly. Address not only the challenges but also potential solutions to demonstrate a comprehensive understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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