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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Over the
last
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 two or three decades, the international
student's
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student
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 ratio has increased as compared to the past. In the past days,
student
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the student
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 used to study their native
land
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 but now they get a degree from
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a
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 foreign
land
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.
This
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 phenomenon has benefits and drawbacks;
this
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 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.
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 with, there are several advantages of studying in abroad. One of the main advantages is that many foreign universities provide plenty of scholarships to
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apply
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pupils who have more interest
to enhance
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in enhancing
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 their knowledge through
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a degree
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degree
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,
as a result
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, numerous domestic learners like to
enroll
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 the foreign
nations
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 to use the scholarship.
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, more than 60% of
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Asian learners prefer to get admission
from
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the
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apply
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developed
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with
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 using
scholarship
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scholarships
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. Another benefit is that studying
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for the
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the
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 degree in a foreign country brings more employment opportunities after finishing the course with reasonable salary and incentives so pupils after completing their school education
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they
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apply
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prefer to get admission from the developed
nations
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. Despite these benefits, there are some drawbacks
of
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this
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 phenomenon. One of the main disadvantages is that
learning
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studying in
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 a foreign nation to get
degrees
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a degrees
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more
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is more
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 expensive than domestic country because
accomodation
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accommodation
 and personal expenses price is more higher.
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, Australia is
more
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a more
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 expensive country for
the
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apply
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international students so numerous students
who
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from
under developing
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underdeveloped
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nations
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 suffer
to manage
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 all these. Another disadvantage is that some students will get
home sickness
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homesickness
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 when they
are moving
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 to other
nations
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 for their higher education because they miss their immediate family members and friends,
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, they might affect depression and isolation.
To conclude
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,
although
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 getting scholarships from developer
nations
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 and plenty of employment chances are the merits of studying in abroad
instead
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 of domestic
land
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, spending too much on accommodation in foreign
land
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 and getting
homesickness
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 are the demerits of
this
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 phenomenon.

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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
Enhance logical structure by using a variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs. Organize information and ideas logically to guide the reader smoothly through the content.
supported main points
Support main points with specific examples and evidence. Develop arguments more fully by explaining the significance of the examples provided and how they reinforce your point of view.
complete response
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clear comprehensive ideas
Develop clearer and more comprehensive ideas by expanding on the reasons behind advantages and disadvantages. More in-depth analysis and explanation will help to clarify your arguments.
relevant specific examples
Include more relevant and specific examples to illustrate your points. Draw on personal experience, studies, or current events to provide a concrete context for your arguments.

Your opinion

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