The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighbourhood since 1920.

The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighbourhood since 1920.
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This
pair of maps
depicts
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change
over the course of a century in the Sawry
District
neighborhood
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by showing the area in 1920 and 2020.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that many developmental changes occurred in the Swary
District
during the given years. The
overall
change
in the
neighborhood
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is one of growth. It is interesting to notice that by 2020 there were more businesses, more housing, and greater public services.
However
, not all businesses and services remained intact after 1920.Business and housing saw the most
change
and growth. The cannery present in 1920 was replaced by an office complex. Two of the houses near the Elmwood River were demolished and replaced by a road and an apartment complex. It is noticeable that
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Oak Avenue went from having two houses and a shop to having three houses, two shops, an apartment complex, and a petrol station. On one hand, it is evident that the
change
in public services was less significant than the
change
in housing and businesses. The Prestwich Primary School was demolished and
then
rebuilt as a bigger school, closer to Oak Street’s shops.
On the other hand
, Elmwood River gained a bridge and a bike path, the latter of which replaced the small beach seen on the 1920 map. In conclusion, it is crystal clear that Swary
District
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witnessed plenty of developments to become a modern
district
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, district with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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