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The graph and bart chart below show the average monthly rainfall and temperature for one region of East Africa

The graph and bart chart below show the average monthly rainfall and temperature for one region of East Africa
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The line graph provides information about
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the statistic
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statistic
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 of temperature in every
month
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 over the
year
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,
while
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 the bar chart expresses the amount of
rainfall
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 which was averaged each
month
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 for 1
year
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.
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it is clear that
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 the degree of
rainfall
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 and temperature were relatively similar and their value
ralated
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related
 to each other, in
this
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 case, they fluctuated over the 12 months.
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 the first graph, the
number of
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temperature stood at 22.0
degrees
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 in January, and
then
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 it had a drastic increase to over 23.5 in
next
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the next
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 2 months where it was the hottest climate of the
year
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.
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this
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, it dropped dramatically to nearly 20.5
degrees
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 in July.
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there was a significant rise again to 23.5
degrees
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.
In
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 the end of the
year
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, it experienced a considerable decrease to below 21.5
degrees
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. Turning to the bar chart, the average amount of
rainfall
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 started at 25
millimetres
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 in the first
month
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. In March, there was a sharp growth in the
averaged
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rainfall
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 to 100
millimetres
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 and
then
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 it reached a peak at 275
millimetres
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 in April.
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, it suddenly declined to 20
millimetres
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 and it remained relatively constant for 4 months. It had a big amount of increase again to 150
millimetres
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 in October and
slighly
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slightly
 grew to above 150
millimetres
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 in November. In
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last
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the last
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month
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 of the period, there was a
drastically
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 fall in the
rainfall
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 level to 50
millimetres
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words month, year, rainfall, degrees, millimetres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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