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The two maps present information about how the village of Stokeford changed from 1930 to 2010. In general, it appears that Stokeford has become a much more modern suburb. The

overall

trend shown in the data is that the territory for houses has been expanded. There were only 10 accommodations in the village in 1930, compared with a huge rise

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houses in 2010. Near to the post office has been built two stores.

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, the primary school has been improved and expanded. One interesting change was the large house had been demolished in order to make for

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the place

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the retirement home.

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territory of gardens has been reduced. Another striking change was the farmland

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been knocked down.

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, comparing the two maps

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can be seen that the bridge remained unchanged.

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, the main road has been extended for residents of the houses. The river stoke remained unchanged.

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Ensure that your essay directly addresses the main topic and includes a clear opinion or stance on the statement provided.

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Choose clear and direct examples that support your opinion and explain how they relate to the statement.

coherence cohesion

Your essay should have a logical flow of ideas, with clear connections and transitions between them.

coherence cohesion

Include an introduction that presents the topic of your essay and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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2 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Failure is proof that desire wasn't strong enough. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Small town center shops are running out of business because rural residents tend to go shopping in big cities store. To what extent do the disadvantages of this development outweigh the advantages?

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