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The two maps present information about how the village of Stokeford changed from 1930 to 2010. In general, it appears that Stokeford has become a much more modern suburb. The
overall
 trend shown in the data is that the territory for houses has been expanded. There were only 10 accommodations in the village in 1930, compared with a huge rise
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 houses in 2010. Near to the post office has been built two stores.
Moreover
, the primary school has been improved and expanded. One interesting change was the large house had been demolished in order to make for
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 the retirement home.
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,
this
 territory of gardens has been reduced. Another striking change was the farmland
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 been knocked down.
By contrast
, comparing the two maps
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 can be seen that the bridge remained unchanged.
Also
, the main road has been extended for residents of the houses. The river stoke remained unchanged.
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Ensure that your essay directly addresses the main topic and includes a clear opinion or stance on the statement provided.
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Choose clear and direct examples that support your opinion and explain how they relate to the statement.
coherence cohesion
Your essay should have a logical flow of ideas, with clear connections and transitions between them.
coherence cohesion
Include an introduction that presents the topic of your essay and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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