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The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
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The table displays
deta
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details
 on
percentage
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the percentage
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on
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of
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 national consumer expenditure
on
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in
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 three categories in five countries in 2002 .
overall
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,
while
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 the vast
majoratiy
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majority
 of people spending
are
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is
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 on food/drinks/tobacco, leisure/education is the least one . in 2002 Turkey and Ireland
have
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had
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 the greatest percentage of consumer expenditure
in
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on
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 food/drinks/tobacco
in
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at
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 32.14 and 28.91
recpectively
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respectively
.
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however
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however,
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 Turkey
also
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 led the leisure/education in 4.35
percentage
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per cent
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.
while
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 Italy had the
high
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highest
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 proportion in clothing/footwear,
Span
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Spain
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 had the least proportion in leisure/education at 9.00 and 1.98 respectively .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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