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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The bar graph illustrates global
pineapple
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 exports by three major
pineapple
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-producing nations between 2009 and 2019,
while
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 the pie chart elucidates the breakdown of consumer costs for each
pineapple
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 in 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in 2009,
country
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B
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 was the most productive
country
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 before being exceeded by
country
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 A in the next decade.
Moreover
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, distribution &
retail
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and retail
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 costs were the major contributors to the price of each
pineapple
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. In terms of the number of pineapples exported at the beginning,
country
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 A and
country
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B
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 started at around a million
tonnes
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 and 4.5 million
tonnes
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, respectively.
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, in 2019,
country
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B
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 experienced a noticeable decrease by approximately half,
whereas
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country
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 A, which overtook
country
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B
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's position, witnessed a skyrocket to around 10 million
tonnes
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.
Furthermore
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,
country
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 C stood below 0,5 metric
tonnes
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 and remained relatively stable throughout the period. Regarding the cost to buyers for each
pineapple
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 in 2019, distribution &
retail
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and retail
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 constituted 35% of the total cost, making it the prime patron to the price, followed by profit and taxes, which accounted for 18% and 16%, respectively. The other costs—international transport, taxes, producer, and export—comprised around a third of the
overall
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 costs.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, b, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • dominant
  • emerging trends
  • production costs
  • transportation
  • retailer markup
  • global trade dynamics
  • sustainability
  • market demand
  • economic factors
  • export volumes
  • logistic costs
  • retail price
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