The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given maps compare the layout of a
park
in 1920 and today.
Overall
,
it is clear that
a big amphitheatre has been added, and a fountain, which was located at the
center
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of the
park
has been demolished throughout
period
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the period
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. In detail, seats, which were located around the
park
, have been gathered at the centre of the
park
.
Then
, a rose garden
has been
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placed
at
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in
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the middle of the
park
, where the fountain was situated in the past, and today it is
surrounding
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by
the
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apply
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seats. Looking more closely at the north-eastern of the maps, a rose garden and a pond have been transformed into a cafe and a play area for kids. Turning to the
south-eastern
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part of the
park
, a water feature is seen today, where a glasshouse was stood.
In addition
, an entrance for parking has been added
this
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part of the
park
. One another novelty in
this
park
is that the stage for musicians has been converted
to
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into
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an amphitheatre
at
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on
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the west side of the
park
.
Finally
, the numbers and the locations have not changed over the time frame.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pond
  • northwest corner
  • large central open area
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented space
  • playground
  • eastern border
  • parking lot
  • convenience
  • commercial zone
  • amenities
  • walking path
  • encircles
  • joggers
  • accessible
  • entrances
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