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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type
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The provided bar charts illustrate data concerning the
incidents
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 and
injuries
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 per 100
million
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 passenger miles
traveled
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travelled
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 (
PMT
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) for four different modes of transportation,
along with
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 demand response. Notably, demand response stands out as the primary contributor to both
incidents
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 and
injuries
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,
while
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 commuter
rail
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 exhibits the lowest
figures
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.
Additionally
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, it is evident that the
number
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 of
incidents
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 consistently exceeds the
number
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 of
injuries
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. Examining the modes of transportation, demand response consistently exceeds 150
million
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PMT
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 for both
incidents
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 and
injuries
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.
In contrast
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, Bus,
Light
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rail
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, Heavy
rail
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, and Commuter
rail
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 register
figures
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 below 100
million
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PMT
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. It is noteworthy that
Bus
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the Bus
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 consistently reports a higher
number
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 of
injuries
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 compared to all
rail
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-mode transportations,
while
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 its incident count is slightly lower than that of
Light
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rail
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. Turning attention to the
number
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 of
incidents
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 and
injuries
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, Commuter
rail
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 emerges as the safest mode with the lowest
figures
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, approximately 25
million
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PMT
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. The disparity in incident counts between Heavy
rail
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 and
Light
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rail
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 is minimal.
Furthermore
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, Heavy
rail
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, Bus, and
Light
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rail
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 exhibit relatively similar incident
figures
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, which
then
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 surge significantly, reaching levels five times higher than those.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, million, pmt, rail, figures, number, light with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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