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The chart below show the percent change in homebuyers in two countries and the types of homes sold in various years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Type of housing sold in the USA in Various years

The chart below show the percent change in homebuyers in two countries and the types of homes sold in various years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Type of housing sold in the USA in Various years
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These two charts including line chart and bite chart depicts a mount of percent change in people who buy
house
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 from 2001 to 2011 and specially in three years: 2002; 2006 and 2010 in two countries namely
USA
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 and
Canada
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. From 2001 to 2002, the housebuyers in US was drop
while
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 was rose
Canada
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.
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, next years, US increased double than
Canada
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, was 70 percent and homebuyers in
Canada
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 in 2003 had the same number with
USA
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 in 2002: 40%. After long time increased, between 2006 to 2008, consumers in
USA
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 maintained 90%
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 one’s in
Canada
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 continued to drop from 90% to 50%, about 40%.
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, between 2000 to 2011, after up and down trend
Canada
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 return to 2007, had 50%. Unlike
Canada
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, the homebuyers in
USA
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 drop from 90% to 20% in 2008 and 2011 respectively after had up and down trend from 2010. Go detail homebuyers trend in
USA
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, there are three types of sales call apartment, townhome and
house
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. In both of 2002 and 2006, apartment
also
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 had the highest present 50% and 49% respectively.
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, in 2010, percent of
house
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 increase to 45%, become the highest, and apartment was the second one’s.
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, 2 types of sales namely town home and
house
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 are rose from 15% to 25% and 30% to 45% in 2002 to 2010 respectively. As observe,
house
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 is the live place which consumers like most.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words house, usa, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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