Most students choose to work part time during their university studies. Do you think it’s good or bad idea? Give your opinion and support with an explanation and examples.

I believe that the positive impact of working during university studies is greater than the negative
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experience
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the topic, when I turned nineteen years old I decided to move out and experimented
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by myself
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I would spend many
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studying and attending classes, the rest of the
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of the day working and little to no time was left for friends,
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it's a very draining lifestyle mentally and
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physically
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slows down your studies, the
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you spend working are
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taken from learning.
On the other hand
, in my opinion, there are a lot of good things that students learn if they
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while
studying
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because they are forced to organise their days, weeks,
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in relation to their exams,
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they learn how to be independent and the importance of money. Another big part is the interpersonal skills; a person
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studied for ten years and didn't
work
is more likely to join a
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relations, and how to be part of a team,
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practical skills and likely to find hard to integrate themselves. The only positive side of studying without working is that you can finish your course faster and look for the job of your dreams earlier. I believe that
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end it all comes to personal choices, what do we value most within personal growth or a faster achievement, where a faster achievement doesn't always reflect
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a fulfilled, happy working life. Working
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studying is an experience that made me grow to be the independent woman that I am today, so I would
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advise that to others.
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