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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The pictorial diagram illustrates the recent construction of the Islip town and its future developmental plan.
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, it can be seen that there will be dramatic changes take place in future except for schools which will remain the same. In the present map, the town has a very simple design which contains the main
road
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 in the middle and shops on either
side
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. The west
side
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 of the
road
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 leads to the school and's opposite
side
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 leads to the park and there is
housing
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a housing
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 system in between.
However
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, in the
future
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future,
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 the main
road
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 will be replaced by the dual carriageway which surrounds the whole village. On the North
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side
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side,
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 the country area and shops will be converted into a huge shopping centre
along with
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bus
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a bus
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 station and car park on either
side
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.
In addition
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, towards the North East
direction
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there will be a new housing scheme developed.
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, the main
road
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 will be replaced by a pedestrian street so, no vehicle entry will be permitted in that area.
On the other hand
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,shops which are located towards the South
direction
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 will remain as it is. In terms of the park , its size will be reduced
due to
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 the new housing system towards the South-East
direction
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 and the older
house
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houses
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 will moved to the West
direction
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, side, direction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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