As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
The modern world changing day by day. When new inventions and
development
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developments
are come
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come
have come
also
it
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they
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internet
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became
into
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in
past
. To an Correct article usage
the past
extent
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extent,
to
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with
this
statement.
Firstly
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did
not get enough time to complete Wrong verb form
do
the
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apply
the
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their
task
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tasks
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The majority
people
who leads
city life, Correct subject-verb agreement
lead
following
a routine life with two or three jobs.So, it is very convenient Wrong verb form
follow
to
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for
such
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
people
to use Add an article
the internet
internet
.They can read local and global Capitalize word
Internet
news
ans
see Correct your spelling
and
advertisement
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advertisements
according to
their leisure time. That's why most of the people
internet
instead
of news papers
.
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newspapers
Secondly
, the advantages and benefits of this
electric device more
than Add a missing verb
are more
news
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newspaper
paper
or other soft copies. It is saves
time, Change the verb form
saves
get
any information Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
in
the Change preposition
at
finger tip
, portable, economically cheaper and Correct your spelling
fingertip
eco friendly
. Add a hyphen
eco-friendly
Every one
can assess the net Replace the word
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at
everywhere. We can read any Change preposition
apply
types
of Fix the agreement mistake
type
magazines
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magazine
, books
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and, books
moreover
we can post our photos advertisement
or upload any videos and like all the Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
programme
can run using the Correct your spelling
programs
internet
and such
varieties of applications. Overall
it is very suitable for all age group
of Fix the agreement mistake
groups
people
On the other hand
, still
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still,
the
old age Correct article usage
apply
people
likes
to read Change the verb form
like
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the news
news
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newspaper
paper
. Majority
of these Correct article usage
The majority
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people
and people
follows
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who follows
the
village life, usually use Correct article usage
apply
news
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newspaper
paper
more than other hard copies. Besides
this
, we can see that the influence of electronic media increasing the local people
too.
To conclude
, we cannot be ruled
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and the acceptance of Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
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the internet
internet
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