The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram presents the process of converting
sugar
cane into sugar
.
Overall
, the process includes 7 steps used for the manufacture, starting with the plant and leading to the sugar
crystals itself.
Firstly
, it takes up to a year or 18 months for sugar
cane to fully grow. After, the canes are fully grown they are harvested by chopping the plants either by hand or a machine. The third step includes sugar
cane being processed into a machine which helps crush the plant to extract the juice out of the plant.
Next,
the resulting liquid is drained through a limestone filter which helps with purification and for the fifth step the juice is placed into an evaporator as the liquid converts into syrup. For the sixth step, the syrup is placed into a centrifuge to separate any remaining sugar
crystals from the syrup. Lastly
, the crystals are dried and cooled for their production and sale.Submitted by ravann.ibrahimli on
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