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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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It is often said that with the bloom of
internet
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 use,
newspapers
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 have become more and more unpopular in today's modern society. I totally agree with
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 view as considered in environmental factors and efficacy.
To begin
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 with, one of the main reasons why
newspapers
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 are becoming old-fashioned is
the
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 harmfulness to the environment. Printing of
newspapers
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 requires tons of paper and ink. The human activities of cutting trees to make paper have always been a concern for the environment as it could lead to deforestation and other global environmental issues.
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,
with
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the advanced technology of the
internet
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,
it
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could reduce the use of paper when people read
news
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 on websites or apps.
For example
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, many newspaper companies,
such
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 as South China Morning Post started to broadcast
news
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 or articles on their social media platform for
individuals
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 to
access
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. Another reason for
newspapers
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 to become less popular is the efficiency and the efficacy of obtaining
news
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 on the
Internet
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.
Firstly
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, most
news
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 or
information
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 is free for anyone to
access
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 on a website or the
internet
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.
This
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 benefits all people who did not have a penny or two for buying
newspapers
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.
Secondly
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, people can
access
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 the most updated
information
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 on the
internet
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.
Newspapers
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 require journalists to write and print it out before putting it in front of the citizens, the
information
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 in the
newspapers
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 may be outdated or not catching up with the newest situation.
In contrast
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,
individuals
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 can easily
access
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 the most updated
news
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 as the
internet
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 is constantly refreshed with new data and
information
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.
Hence
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, more and more
individuals
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 are prone to reading
news
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 and articles on the
internet
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 rather than
newspapers
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. In conclusion, the
internet
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 has become more favourable to
individuals
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 than
press
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the press
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 because of easy
access
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 and environmental concerns.
Although
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newspapers
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 may be still popular among the elderly
populations
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population
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,
news
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 on
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internet
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the internet
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 should be the mainstream in the future.

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Task Achievement
Ensure a balance in discussing both sides of an argument, even if you strongly agree or disagree. This provides a more comprehensive analysis.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve flow and cohesion throughout your essay.
Task Achievement
Try to include more specific examples and details to strengthen your arguments. This makes your essay more persuasive and engaging.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider the proper use of articles and the overall accuracy of language to enhance clarity and coherence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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