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the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

the table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The given table compares the proportion of
consumer
 spending in three different categories
at
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in
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 five different countries in 2002. From the table,
it is clear that
 the Food/Drinks/Tobacco
category
 has the highest percentage of spending, followed by
Clothing
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the Clothing
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/Footwear
category
, and
consumer
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consumers
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 spent the least
at
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on
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 Leisure/Education compared to the other categories. During the given period,
consumer
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consumers
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 in all of the five countries spent most of their money
for
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on
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 Food/Drinks/Tobacco, with Turkey as the nation with the highest
consumers
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consumer
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 percentage (32%) and Sweden as the least (15.77%).
Next,
the
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apply
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clothing/footwear was the second
category
which
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in which
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consumers
 spent most
their
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of their
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 money
into
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, with Italian
consumers
 (9%) as the highest
spender
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spenders
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 in
this
category
, and Sweden as the least (5.4%).
Lastly
,
Leisure
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the Leisure
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/Education
category
 has the
fewest
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lowest
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 percentage of
consumer
 spending compared to the other categories, with Turkey
consumers
 (4.35%)
had
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having
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 the highest consumption in
this
category
,
in contrast
 with Spanish
consumers
 (1.98%) as the least spender.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, category, consumers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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