Your friend asked you to find a part-time job for him/her to earn some money while studying. You found a job that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter give him/her the job description; explain why he/she should take the job; say what he/she should do to get the job.
Dear Henry,
I’m so glad to hear that you’ve already started your brand-new university life here in Parkville, and I hope you’re doing well. In your
last
email, you asked me whether there were part-time job opportunities, and I happen to know a local coffee shop that is
seeking part-time employees. I’d like to share with you some information about this
position.
The coffee shop is called Blue Jones and it’s just about five minutes walk from your university. Basically, you’re going to work at the cashier, help customers make orders and prepare the drinks they ordered according to
the instructions. There may be other tasks like stock taking occasionally but it won’t take you a lot of time.
Personally, I find this
job matches you well as the schedule is quite flexible. It does provide night shift and you’re allowed to discuss your intended working time and hours with the manager. Besides
, most of the customers are students and local residents, so I believe it’s a good way to integrate yourself into the local community.
If you find yourself interested in this
opportunity, you can just walk into the shop and directly talk with the manager, but I strongly recommend that you visit their website first to figure out more information and details about the business. It could also
be beneficial if you communicate with them by email first.
Anyway, I hope you enjoy your life in Parkville and if you need further
information or advice, just send me an email.
Can’t wait to hear from you.
Best wishes,
Changyue ZhouSubmitted by 997339155 on
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Coherence and Cohesion
You have successfully identified and presented key information in a well-organized manner. To further enhance coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next with clear transitions.
Task Achievement
While your task response is comprehensive, consider including more details or personal anecdotes to reinforce why the job is particularly suitable for Henry. This could help in achieving a more complete response.
Writing Tone
You've utilized an appropriate writing tone for this informal letter. Maintaining this tone consistently throughout would further strengthen your writing.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.