Students should pay the full cost of university studies,rather than have free higher education provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

i
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belive
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believe
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that
education
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goverment
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government
must ensure every
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of the country.
Education
must
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accessible
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everyone even if you are poor and don't have money to pay
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tution
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tuition
. to do that the regulation must be
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make
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to
guaranting
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guaranteeing
every
residen
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resident
can
acsess
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access
education
from primary school until higher level
education
. even though, i agree
with
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students have free higher
education
provided by the government but is just for
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needy family if
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rich family they must pay
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for
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university study
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depending
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example if
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a scholar
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scholar
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family have
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ten
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million rupiahs they must pay twenty persen for they child.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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