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Some experts believe that a second language should be taught at an early age. Do the advantages ouyweigh the disadvantages

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Nowadays, a number of professionals have confidence in acquiring additional linguistic proficiency as early as possible. I believe that children can learn language quickly, and
this
 advantage far outweighs any potential disadvantages. One downside of implementing additional language education in schools is that it requires significant resources.
This
 is owing to the fact that they need to recruit trained teachers and build curriculum development to provide
this
 practice, and
consequently
, they ought to increase the tuition fee for parents.
However
, I think
this
 can be avoided if they use free materials on the internet,
such
 as Duolingo and YouTube. Both of them have diverse dialect learning with multilevel proficiency, from newbie to expert level, and students can maximize
this
 opportunity to acquire new linguistic abilities or enhance their current level. On the beneficial side, applying
this
 practice to children is relatively effective since they learn everything rapidly.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that they have better neuroplasticity, which is the ability of brain cells to integrate and build memory, than adults.
As a result
 of
this
 condition, they can learn various vocabularies in months,
whereas
 the elderly may need years.
For instance
, the majority of people in Indonesia are multilingual, as they learned numerous tongues in the country, namely Javanese, English, and Indonesian, as children. I think
this
 competency is a great advantage for them in the future
due to
 the fact it will benefit their jobs when they become expatriates, overseas academics, ambassadors, or members of international delegations. In conclusion,
although
 providing additional language learning would result in adequate resources, I believe
this
 downside is greatly outweighed by the upside that
this
 bilingual could help their career in the future.
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Make sure to present a clear thesis statement in the introduction. This essay briefly mentions the main idea, but a clearer, more explicit thesis statement at the end of the introduction could improve clarity and focus.
Coherence and Cohesion
Introduce paragraph topics clearly and use a variety of cohesive devices to link ideas within and across paragraphs. While the essay demonstrates a good degree of coherence, further refinement in this area can lead to higher scores.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your arguments. The essay does a good job at this, but incorporating more detailed and diverse examples can strengthen the argument and add depth to your writing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Vary sentence structures and use a mixture of simple and complex sentences to demonstrate linguistic flexibility and maintain reader interest.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • cognitive development
  • multilingual proficiency
  • curriculum integration
  • linguistic acumen
  • cultural competencies
  • globalization
  • neuroplasticity
  • second language pedagogy
  • academic performance
  • resource-intensive
  • cognitive overload
  • heritage language preservation
  • language immersion
  • parental engagement
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