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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019.
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The
chart
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 displays the amount of pineapples exported by
three
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the three
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 countries that produced the most in 2009 and 2019.The pie
chart
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 indicates data for the costs that contributed to the consumers in 2019.
Overall
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, the first
country
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 had the highest increase in
outflow
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the outflow
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 of pineapples from 2009 to 2019 and stayed the highest
at the end
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.Unlike
for
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apply
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country
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 number B, it
begin
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began
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 with being the top exporter and was the only
that
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one
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the
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whose
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 numbers got lower.
Moreover
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, the
last
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country
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 had a small uptrend in the period of 10 years.
Also
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, based on the pie
chart
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, the
cost
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 of distribution and retail had the biggest
shate
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share
state
shade
.
To begin
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 with,
conutry
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country
 number A started from less than 2 million tons to slightly more than 10.
Furthermore
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, the second
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country
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country's
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 total exports went from more than 4 to less than 2 million tons.
Nonetheless
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, the
last
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country
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 almost stood the same with a little increase in outflow yet still to stay lower than 2 million tons in total. Moving to the pie
chart
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, 35% of the
cost
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 contributed to
distriution
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distribution
 and retail continued by taxes and international
trasport
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transport
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cost
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costs
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 with each at 16 and 12 per cent. whilst the
proft
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profit
 took place at only 18%, the
importat
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important
import
 licences had 10% of the total share.
Nonetheless
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, the producer and export
cost
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had
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was
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 9 per cent of the total
cost
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, nonetheless".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, country, cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • dominant
  • emerging trends
  • production costs
  • transportation
  • retailer markup
  • global trade dynamics
  • sustainability
  • market demand
  • economic factors
  • export volumes
  • logistic costs
  • retail price
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