In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this
Many
students
choose to have a gap year
after graduating from formal education institutes while
some of them prefer to go straight to college after graduating. Those options affect student's performance
and opportunities. In this
practice, we will discuss both advantages and disadvantages.
On the one hand, a gap year
is utilised to explore many opportunities and experiences for students
. During one year
, they can acquire many skills
that are not taught in formal education such
as interaction and leadership through many activities, for example
, joining a community, NGOs and internships. Furthermore
, those skills
will benefit them in their work life because many companies from industries such
as marketing and advertising are prioritizing soft skills
rather than technical skills
because, in their perceptions, technical skills
can be taught in the meantime. As expected, it will benefit them to be different and unique from other people.
On the other hand
, taking a year
break after graduation is affecting students
' focus and performance
. Their motivation would decrease and they experience difficulty in studying because they are not used to being back in the education environment again. For instance
, a student who already used to freelance will be hurdling in adapting to scheduled classes. Thus
, being back after having a year
break will affect student's performance
.
To conclude
, taking a gap year
will be beneficial for students
in terms of new experiences. However
, to start studying again after a year
would be challenging for them because it might ruin their focus and performance
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