There is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co-arrange the party. In your letter: -Say what would you do differently than last year -Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year -Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.

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Dear Aleesha, Hope you are doing well, how long since we
are meet
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met
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toughter
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tougher
together
.
On next
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month we are
planned for
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planning
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our annual work party. The manager
select
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me as the programme secretary, but I need your support too. We should definitely do some verity of activities on
this
time than past years. I
think
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, plan a live DJ
instead
of some kind of
recordings
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recording
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. Amal and Aneesh
are sing
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very well. The game section
in
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apply
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last
year was very
hesitated
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. At
last
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last,
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it leads to
fight
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. So, we can do some other things more than that. Shall we conduct
this
programme on the new conventional centre in Niagara
.
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There we get enough space for dancing and playing
while
conducting
this
DJ. We can meet on coming Friday
in
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at
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birthday
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the birthday
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celebration of Arun. On that
occation
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occasion
, we may finalize our party plans. Loving,
Fency
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Fancy
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Content
For task achievement, make sure your letter directly addresses all points asked in the prompt. Clearly state what you would do differently this year, what wasn't good last year, and your suggestion for a meeting place to plan the party, using distinct paragraphs for each point.
Structure
Improve coherence and cohesion by organizing your ideas more logically and clearly. Start with an introduction, follow with a paragraph for each main point, and conclude appropriately. Use transitional phrases to smoothly connect your ideas.
Tone
Polish your greeting and closing. A more formal or consistent tone might be suitable depending on the context. Ensure that your greeting is appropriate for the relationship with your colleagues and that your closing effectively signals the end of the letter.
Focus
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea relevant to the prompt. This will help the reader follow your arguments more easily and make your writing more persuasive and coherent.
Language
Proofread your letter for grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors to enhance clarity and professionalism. Consider using tools or asking a friend to help review your writing.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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