The maps below show a science park in the 2008 and the same park today.
The provided map compares a science park in 2008 and the same park at present after modernisation.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that during the development all the grasslands had disappeared, while
some new facilities were replaced such
as,
station and business units.
On the one hand, in the south of the outline, an innovation centre occupy the previous IT centre's place and a new station was added in the middle of the railway. Remove the comma
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In addition
, development led to an increase in size in cyber security as well as
the car park, number of trees in this
part has not changed. Moreover
, a new bus stop was located at the east of the graph below the new cycle path.
On the other hand
, the north of the map has been equipped with some new places. Precisely, a big segment was dedicated to the research and development department, where grassland has existed before. Furthermore
, the offices remained
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the bottom of the reception part has been modified to a university hub.Submitted by amirhossein7179 on
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