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Some people think that electric cars are important for us, while others think that they are expensive. Discuss both sides of view and give your own opinion

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In recent times,
due to
 technology enhancement electric
vehicles
 have been introduced which in a way are reducing greenhouse gas emissions but come with a high initial purchase price.
This
 has been a point of discussion as there are different opinions given by different people. I agree with the advancement and introduction of electric automobiles in our lifestyles, we will be talking more about it in the upcoming essay. Some folk believe that
vehicles
 that do not use fossil fuels are helping our environment and the transition to them from traditional
vehicles
 is the new future. Governments and organizations worldwide are promoting electric cars as an alternative to reduce dependence on oil and improve the quality of air which contributes to achieving global climate goals.
For example
, Tesla has become the new favourite amongst people as they have introduced new technology and AI-inbuilt machines that run on electricity, which has resulted in hassle-free driving.
On the other hand
, the starting purchase price of these
vehicles
 is kept too high which is not possible for everyone to afford. The batteries that are installed in
this
 transportation have caused the higher price tags.
Additionally
, a lack of infrastructure, there are fewer charging points available at close distances as compared to petrol pumps.
Moreover
, concerns about range anxiety
which
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make these cars a less attractive option for some potential buyers.
For instance
, there are electric scooters launched in the market, but fewer crowd prefer to ride them on long routes as they fear the batteries and
thus
 do not buy them. In conclusion, both views have their own pros and cons, which
also
 depend on society and communities.
Vehicles
 operated by electricity are expensive, but they are
also
 environmentally friendly. I strongly believe electric cars are the new future as there are limited gases left for the next generations to use
while
 electricity can be generated in abundance.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear logical flow to connect paragraphs, using a wider range of linking words.
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Work on including more specific examples to bolster each point for a more compelling argument.
coherence cohesion
Continue using clear introductory and conclusion paragraphs to encapsulate your discussion effectively.
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Attempt to dive deeper into both views presented to enhance the depth and persuasiveness of your discussion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • fossil fuel-driven vehicles
  • environmental organizations
  • air quality
  • global climate goals
  • initial purchase price
  • batteries
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • operating costs
  • financially accessible
  • technology advances
  • government incentives
  • transition to electric vehicles
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