The street where you live is in poor condition. Write a letter to local City Council in your letter you Explain the situation Explain the likely consequence Describe the change you expect to occur

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to let you know that the street of Kitchener is in poor condition and no one is bothered about it. Not only there is an overloaded stinky public dustbin, but
also
the road has cracks and holes. Let me explain the consequences of the situation. The cracks and holes on the road make it difficult to drive.
Additionally
, if the holes will not be fixed before the monsoon, there will be an increase in the growth of mosquitoes. Henceforth, there will be a rise in malaria disease.
Moreover
, the waste is not collected properly from the public garbage bin which makes it difficult to pass by the area as it stinks badly. Would you kindly look into the situation and I request you to fix the damaged roads as soon as possible.
Also
, it is possible to replace the stinky dustbin from our area with a new one. I will highly appreciate it. Thank you for your consideration. Faithfully, Abc
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Consider adding more details about the current maintenance efforts or lack thereof by the city council to strengthen your point about negligence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure more consistent use of transition words for better flow between ideas.
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The letter addresses the recipient directly and uses a polite tone throughout, which is effective for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
The closing statement is clear and polite, encouraging a positive response from the city council.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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