Write a letter to your friend from a different country. Invite him/her to a party at your home and include the following: what the party is about give directions on how to get to your place suggest how to accommodate him/her

Hi Joy, How are you? I hope life is treating you well. It's been a year now since we
last
met. Anyway, I'm writing
you
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to invite you to my country. Let me explain. As you always wanted to visit India for its cultural experience,
this
is the best chance for you to explore. Next month, on the precious day of Diwali, we will have a big party at home for my parents' anniversary. So, we are celebrating both events on the same day. Diwali is a huge festival in India; we celebrate Diwali to commemorate our god, Rama, by lighting up candles and decorating our houses. If you plan to come to India, book flights to Delhi. After reaching Delhi, you can use local transport to my village. The name of my town is Vadali; after getting to Vadali station, contact me on my phone. I'll be there to pick you up. As I mentioned before, we are throwing a big party, and the whole house will be packed with all the family members.
However
, I've talked to my friend who lives right behind my house. You just have to stay there for one week, after you can jump into my house. Meanwhile, that friend of mine will give you company in exploring the city when I am busy organizing celebrations. Hope you will think about it. Can't wait to see you. Lots of love, Mary
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Task Achievement
While your letter adequately accomplishes the task, including more specific details about the party, such as the exact date, start time, or what kind of attire guests should wear, could enhance your response.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter flows smoothly, but you could improve coherence by making connections between paragraphs clearer. Consider adding transitions like “Moreover” or “In addition to celebrating Diwali” to link the celebration of Diwali and your parents' anniversary more closely.
Coherence & Cohesion
To further enhance cohesion, try to vary your sentence structures and use a wider range of linking words. This could make your writing sound more sophisticated and natural.
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