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Some people say that ut is better to work in the large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #ut #work #company
Rather than a small
company
, some individuals say, it would be better to
work
 in the large one. I completely agree
about
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this
 statement. Working for a large
company
 can offer access to resources and benefits compared to a small
company
. Large
company
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companies
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 typically have greater source financial, which can provide
employees
well-being
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with well-being
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.
For instance
, Google's more than 57,000
employees
 love everything the "Googleplex" has to offer, including free Wi-Fi-enabled shuttles to and from
work
, free healthy meals, laundry and fitness facilities, 18 weeks of fully paid maternity leave and on-site childcare, and competitive pay— they report 84% high job satisfaction.
However
, a small
company
 can not provide the things as a large companies do. There are
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lot of limitations since the
company
 is not growing rapidly yet. Despite
of
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it
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this
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, sometimes
small
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a small
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company
 might teach you how to become a visioner
ones
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apply
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that
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 you will not get in
the
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a
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 big
company
. Smart Glasses is one of them, the
employees
 not be able to get
the
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access as Google did, but the survey found that
employees
 have great experiences during
work
 for
this
company
. In conclusion, I agree that
work
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 for
big
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a big
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company
 will guide you to find some benefits
,
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 but
work
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working
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 for
small
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a small
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company
 is not that bad because you
also
 can
gained
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gain
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 some
experiences
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experience
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.
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