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Band 8.5

You have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that was booked by the organiser of a company meeting. Write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include •Details about the meeting •The problem you face •What should be done

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the
hotel
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 accommodation provided by your organization
last
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 week. First of all, I would like to thank you for your effort in searching for and booking the
hotel
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 for the meeting members. But for your own information and consideration for future booking, I have to complain about the cleanliness of the rooms and the loud noise reaching them from the street overnight. These problems led me and my colleagues not to be able to rest well
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, our performance during
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 an important meeting was insufficient. I do not normally complain about the
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 situations but I may offer some solutions to
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 problem that you might need to take into account. When you are booking the
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, please make an inquiry about the acoustic condition
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 the room's tidiness. In the end, I am being forced to say that if the next meeting is going to be held in the same
hotel
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 I am going to refuse respectfully. Yours faithfully Afzal Ebrahimi

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Task Achievement
Ensure to provide more specific details regarding the meeting itself (e.g., its location, date, purpose, or outcome). This will establish a stronger context and make your letter more compelling.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, consider using more varied transitional phrases to connect your sentences and paragraphs more smoothly. For instance, you could replace repetitive connectors like 'but' with alternatives such as 'however,' 'nevertheless,' or 'on the other hand'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Mix short and long sentences to create a more engaging and readable text. This variation can help maintain the reader's attention and enhance the overall flow of your letter.
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