Whether or not someone achieves their aims in life is mostly a question of luck? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that achieving goals in

people

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's lives depends on their

luck

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, I completely disagree with the given statement.

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with, there are many reasons why I am against

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statement. The first reason is that when

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achieve their aims, hard work and enormous physical contributions have

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in it. Without investing time, and effort physically and mentally it is impossible to get success.

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, Elen Mask is the richest person in the world, because he spends a lot of effort to achieve his goals, not depend on

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, with best effort

also

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needs ability.

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can be low or high.

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, economically sufficient support for a person makes them more self-dependent and creates more concentration on their aims.

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, though

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is important for

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's lives,

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, family plays a crucial role in achieving the target destination. When support comes from individuals families

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can take it as an inspiration.

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, they spend more time doing hard work than other time and

finally

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get good output.

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, society works dramatically to achieve aims for any person.

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people

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who want to participate in any goals that are

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helpful for the community. If they get support it is easy to achieve

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it is not possible if they depend on

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only. In conclusion,

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luck

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is a part and parcel of an individual's life. In my opinion, it is hard to achieve without other crucial things. Because those things are ultimately more important than

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Task Achievement

Ensure a clear and succinct thesis statement in your introduction to directly address the essay prompt. Further, explicitly state your position (agree or disagree) to enhance clarity.

Coherence & Cohesion

Incorporate a wider range of linkage words and phrases to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs, thereby enhancing the essay's coherence.

Task Achievement

Introduce specific, concrete examples to support your main points. This will strengthen your argument and make it more persuasive to the reader.

Coherence & Cohesion

Proofread your essay to correct minor spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'Elen Mask' instead of 'Elon Musk'. These small mistakes can slightly detract from the overall professionalism of your essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

258 words

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Whether or not someone achieves their aims in life is mostly a question of luck? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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