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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the numer of new shops that opened in one coutry between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the numer of new shops that opened in one coutry between 2011 and 2018.
#shops #numer #coutry
The presented line graph provides the proportion of shop closures and openings in one country between 2 years 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, during
this
 eight-
year
 period, it is clearly shown that the biggest amount of closings of stores remained in 2013,
meanwhile
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 openings in
first
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the first
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year
was
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were
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 the highest compared to other much less
six
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six-year
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year
period
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periods
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. By 2012, opened
shops
 at the beginning with
the
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a
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 huge amount of stores went into free-fall for almost 4500 shop
lose
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 in
one
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a
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year
 period.
However
, in 2004 it moved upward
for
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 almost 6100 new
shops
. Afterwards, the numbers fluctuated to a downward trend
as well
as
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and
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 in
next
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the next
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 4
year
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years
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it
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they
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 stayed
a
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at a
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plateau in 2015 and 2017
also
 collapsed by 2018. Closed
shops
 constituted stability
although
 in 2014 numbers plunged from almost 7000 to nearly 500
shops
.
Furthermore
, it returned to
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a high
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high level
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 tendency compared to opened
shops
. As can be seen from the graph, the
amount
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number
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 of closed
shops
by
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apply
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making up 5000
shops
 closed the final
year
 with the highest number
whereas
 opened
shops
 with
the
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apply
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little difference made up 3000
shops
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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