The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The given graph illustrates the
number
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of
shops
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that were closed and open in one country between 2011 and 2018. It is clear to note that the
number
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of shop closures and openings fluctuated wildly and
overall
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had a downward trend. In
this
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period the
number
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of
shops
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that closed decreased
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about 3 times from 8500 to 3000.
By contrast
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the
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of new
shops
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experienced a small reduction from 6500 to 5200.
Although
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opening numbers from 2011 to 2014 and from 2016 to 2018 were gradual, in 2014 it experienced a 7 times fall, a sharp decline, and a dramatic increase in 2016. Even though closure numbers were higher than openings
at the end
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of the period with both declined in numbers, but
number
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of new
shops
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was relatively more.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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